210 ❯ STEP 5. Build Your Test-Taking Confidence
This high-range essay was written by a student who is both confident and well-versed
and one who has balanced the presentation with scientific and introspective illustrations in
support of the argument.Rating Student Sample B
This is a mid-range essay for the following reasons:- Clearly understands Stegner’s statement and the demands of the prompt
- Creative voice is present
- An interesting objectification of humanity (paragraph 2 —“Homo Sapiens”)
- Strong conclusion
- Linkage between man’s destruction of the wilderness and its consequences needs further
development - Development of the argument needs further support
- A few syntactical errors
- Lacks needed transitions
This student writer has a definite opinion to which he or she gives a strong voice.
Although there is a strong, clear opening and conclusion, the body paragraphs containing
the argument need further development.