CHAPTER 12 / WRITING A GREAT ESSAY 455
Practice 9: Write Concisely
Redundancy Sweeping Practice
Eliminate any redundancies in the following sentences.
1.An effective and good manager must need to rely on sound, solid management principles as well as past
experience.2.Both parents as well as students should have input into the new testing plan.3.Many cleaning substances should not be combined together, because violent reactions could result.4.Even if each and every citizen contributed to the effort, it would still take several years to complete.5.The food and blankets dropped for the suffering refugees were far from sufficient enough to ward off the hunger
and cold.6.We watched the jet until it disappeared from view.Tightening-Up Practice
Rewrite the following sentences to eliminate wordiness.
7.In this day and age, all too many people have a dependence on television as their exclusive source of information.8.Few people are aware of the fact that such gambling is in violation of federal law.9.Due to the fact that corporations endeavor to achieve the maximization of profit, they rarely put their focus on
environmental needs.10.In the event that your boss expresses opposition to your proposal at the meeting, consider having a head-to-
head conversation with her about it personally.
11.It is certainly clear that too few people give consideration to the fact that economic strength is often reflective
of the hopes of consumers.
Check your answers with the answer key at the end of the chapter.