754 MCGRAW-HILL’S SAT
The following essay received 2 points out of a possible 6, meaning that it demonstrates some incompe-
tencein that it- has a seriously limited point of view
- demonstrates weak critical thinking
- uses inappropriate or insufficient examples, reasons, and other evidence to support its thesis
- is poorly focused and organized and has serious problems with coherence
- demonstrates frequent problems with language and sentence structure
- contains errors in grammar and usage that seriously obscure the author’s meaning
It is absurd to say that violence is because of all the vi-
olence on video games television. Actually I think that
video games make you better at eye-hand coordina-
tion which is a valuable skill. Hundreds of years be-
fore video games and movies and television, there
were murder and violence. Human beings are violent
people and the exposure to violence does not make us
more violent than we already were. If we did not have
all of these impressive technological advancessuch as
radio, television and film, we would still be commit-
ting acts of violence. There will always be violent hu-
mans that are ready to hurt others to get what they
want and eliminating violent references from our
music and television shows might even make people
madder.Believing that the violence in the media has made the
members of our society like violent murderers is an
absurd notion. Sure, there are lots video games on the
market that involve fighting ninjas and battling army
troops. Yes, nightly television shows on the public
television networks show many a violent episode.
Sure, the nightly news is covered with violent crimes
and such. For instance, the popular music of this era
is full of violent references and foul language. But, no
experiment or statistics that I have seen proves the
above statement to be true. Just because a teenager
kills over 500 fake people on his ninja fighting video-
game, it does not mean that after he turns off the game
console that he will run outside in his ninja costume
and start attacking the people in his neighborhood.