Writing Academic English 4th Edition

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PRACTICE 2

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Paraphrases

OriginalPassage 3

Source:Page 17 ofthesamearticleasinpassages1 and2.

Anotherhealthproblemisthepotentialforbonedeterioration.Ina weightless

environment,thebodyproduceslesscalcium.Astronautsmustexerciseatleast

threehoursa daytopreventboneloss.

__A. Anotherproblemisthepossibilityofboneloss,according

toNASAphysicianPatrickClinton.Inweightlessspace,

thebodymakeslesscalcium.Astronautshavetoexercise

a minimumofthreehoursa daytoavoidlosingbone(17).

______B.AccordingtoNASAphysicianPatrickClinton,weightcan

bea problem.Astronautsmusttakeextracalciumand

exerciseatleastthreehoursa daytokeepfromgaining

weightandtopreventbonedamage(17).

__C.AccordingtoNASAphysicianPatrickClinton,astronauts

couldsufferboneloss.Beingweightlesscausesthebody

tolosecalcium,whichisimportantforstrength,so

exercisingatleastthreehoursdailyis necessarytokeep

theirbonesstrong.

__D. AccordingtoNASAphysicianPatrickClinton,astronauts

alsofacepossibleboneloss.Becauseweightlessness

causesthebodytolosecalcium,exercisingatleastthree

hoursdailyisnecessarytokeeptl1eirbonesstrong(17).

Writea paraphraseofeachofthepassagesthatfollow.

Step 1 Readtheoriginalpassageseveraltimesuntilyouunderstandit well.

Youmayfindit helpfultounderlinethemainpoints.

Step 2 Makenotesinthespaceprovided,changingvocabularywords

whereverpossible.

Step 3 Writeyourparaphraseinyourownwords.Remembertochangeboth

vocabularyandsentencestructure.

Step 4 Checkyourparaphrasetomakesureyouhavenotchangedthe

meaningoftheoriginalpassage.

Step 5 Addanin-textcitationintheproperformat theendofeachparaphrase.

Step 6 Ifyourinstructorrequests,prepareanentryfora works-citedlistfor

eachsource.

OriginalPassage 1

Source:Page 18 ofa three-pagearticleintheOctober15,2003,issueofSpace

Sciencemagazine.Thetitleofthearticleis"MannedMarsFlight:Impossible

Dream?"Theauthoris PatIickClinton,a NASAphysician.

A secondmajorproblemismaintainingastronauts'mentalhealth.Beingconfined

forlongperiodsoftimeindarkandhostilespaceundoubtedlyproducesanxiety.

Lonelinessandboredomareotherpsychologicalconcerns.