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Youshouldwriteatleast 250 words.Useyourownideas, knowledgeandexperienceand
supportyourargumentswithexamplesandwithrelevantevidence.


modelanswer:


TheadvancedMindmachines'socalled theComputers'areno doubtthebest productsoflatesttechnology.Onecannot
imaginetheadvancementoflifeandScienceswithoutthesemachines.
Butlikeotherachievements;they have
theirown goodand badeffectsasseenwithexperienceand passageoftime.Inmy
opiniontheyaregoodifusedforeducationaland beneficialusesforhealthandliving
etc.
Basicallytwentiethcentury had beenfamousforitslatestComputertechniquesand
theirapplication on ourlives.Datasshown onComputershelp ustoassesshowmuch
educationisconductedthroughthismedia.Theassessmentwaysaswellas
examinationsareimproved.Moreover personalskillsofreadingandwritingarefarmore
improvedthroughComputers.MoreoverScienceandtechnology progressedimmensely
withcomputers.Researcherslikecloningandtransplants
areonly possiblewithmoderncomputerizedskills.
Good questioncomesto onesmind ...
wherewillthisComputerwouldtakeus next??Certainly no oneknows!Wemight
explorenewplanners.May bewewillbuy housesonMoon,MarsorJupitor.Orwemight
looseourownidentity.Onecannotforgettheend of 2000 millenniumwheneverybody
wasinchaostothinkwhatwill happenifthecomputerscrash?Theaeroplaneswere
goingtocrashandthetrainswouldcolloid.ThatShowweareforcedtothinkthatone
should notbe dependentonthesemachineafterallwearehumans.Wearehereto
commandcomputersnotthemto orderus.


( 249 words)


Thisisan answerwritten byacandidate
who achieved aBand 5score.Hereistheexaminer'scomment:


Thecandidatehasattemptedto organizesomegoodargumentswith validexamples
andcomplexideas.Thereissomerelevant vocabulary(cloning)andsynonymsavoid
repetition(badeffectsv hindrance, goodeffectsv help).However,theargumentsin
paragraph 3arenotclearandthe'against'argumentsarecontainedinthefinal
paragraph,with noseparateconclusion.Therearefrequentgrammaticalinaccuracies
(scienceandtechnology progressed,Researcherslikecloning,wherewillthiscomputer
wouldtakeus,thatshowwe).Thisanswerhasalsolostmarksbecauseitistooshort
( 190 words).

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