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TVandcinematoday doshowalargeamountofviolenceand,althoughwetryand
shield ouryoung peoplefromseeingtoomuch,theystillgettowatchit.Attheageof
eighteeninmycountrytheycansee


everythinganyway.Violenceonthestreets hasincreased.Thathasbeen proved.The
connection betweenTV‛sandthecinema‛s obsessionwith violenceandtoday‛sstreet
violencecannotbeproved butitislogicalthatthetwoareconnected.Young people
imitatewhattheyseeanditislogicalthattheyseeglamourinwhatthey dowhen
theycommitviolence.
Howcanwelessen violence?ReducingtheamountofviolenceonTVandinthecinema
wouldcertainly beagoodstart.Beingmorevigilantaboutwhatagechildrenarewhen
theyseeviolenceinthesemedia,andraisingtheagelimitswouldalso help.Another
goodideawould betochanneltheviolenceofyoung
people.Idon‛tthinkthatnationalserviceshould bere-establishedinthiscountry but,
ifpeopleareconvicted ofviolence


andsentto prison,thenwhy notgivethemtheoption ofservinginthearmy.Their
violencewillbecontrolledandtheywill
besubjectedto disciplinesothattheywill bebetterabletocontrolthemselveswhen
theyleave.
ThusIagreewiththestatementthatcinemaandTVviolenceaffectstheyoung people
in oursociety.Therearesomethingsthatcan bedoneto betterthesituation butIdoubt
whetheranythingwill bedone.


( 294 words)


Sample 109


Youshouldspendabout 40 minutesonthistask.


Withthepressuresontoday’syoungpeopletosucceedacademically,some
peoplebelievethatnon-academicsubjectsatschool(eg:physicaleducation
andcookery)shouldberemovedfromthesyllabussothatchildrencan
concentratewholly on academicsubjects.
Towhatextentdo youagreeordisagree?


Youshouldwriteatleast 250 words.


modelanswer:


Whatyoung peopleshouldstudyatschool haslong beenthesubjectofintensedebate
andthisisaquestionthatcertainly does


nothaveonecorrectanswer.
Weneedto provideyoung peoplethebest possiblechanceofdoingwellatschool.In
traditionalcurriculumthereisawide variety ofsubjectswithamix ofacademicand non-
academicsubjects.Inthisway a young personisformedwitharoundededucation.Non-

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