Icannotacceptthissituationanylonger.Especially becauseIhaveveryimportant
examsnexttermandIreallymuststudy hard.This iswhyIwouldbeverygratefulifI
could haveanotherroomnextterm.Itwould bemostconvenientformenot havingto
sharemyroomwithsomeoneelse.
Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyousoon.
Yourfaithfully,
IvanSidorov
EXAMINERCOMMENT:(Band 7)
The answer is also short. Although ideasareoften providedinthetaskrubric,
candidates are at liberty to include some oftheirownideasintheiranswers.Inthis
case,thecandidatehasattemptedtoincorporatesomeoriginalmaterial.Theanswer
readsquitefluently,iswell organisedandthereisgood useofconjunctions to link
points. There aresomegrammaticalerrorsbutthesedo notaffectthereadergreatly
andthereisevidenceofsomemorecomplexsentencestructures
Sample 22
You have just spent a weekend staying attheLiloHotelinAdelaide.Whenyou
gethomeyoufindthatyouhaveleftabag atthehotel.
Youshould write at least 150 words.Youshouldspendabout 20 minutes onthistask.modelanswer:DearMr.Simpson,
Istayedin yourhotelonthe 23 rdand 24th ofOctober.IwasinRoom603.When I
arrived home, I discovered that I had left
oneofmy bagsatthehotel.Could you pleasecheck yourLostandFoundDepartment
andseeifmy bagisthere?
Thebagisasmallblackleather, documentcasewithanarrowstrap.Insidethebag, you
willfindseveralbusinesscards, afountain pen,asmalladdressbook,threecopiesofa
businessproposalandasilver pocket calculator. These things are not very valuable
inmoneyterms, butthey havealotofpersonalvalue.