Best Practice Book for IELTS Writing

Beginyour letter as follows: Dear

SirorMadam... ,

modelanswer

DearSirorMadam

Iamwritingtorequestputting offthejobwhich you haveoffered.Ireallywantthejob but
Ihaveaimportantpreviouscommitment.So,Icannotstarttowork nextweek.

Iwasofferedthejob yesterday,whichwanted me to start next week. Thank youso
muchforofferingthejob.Ireallywant

toworkatyourcompany.However, Icannotstartnextweek becauseIhavea previous
commitmentwhichismysister'swedding.Itisnextweekend, besides.Shelivesin
Koreaandshewantmeto prepare herweddingwithmy parents.SoIhaveto goto
Koreanext Monday.AftertheweddingIwilltravelafewdayswithmy parentswho
wantedmetotravelbecauseI havelivedfor4 yearsfarfromhome.ThatiswhyIcannot
startthework nextweek. IwillcomebacktoSydneytwoweekslater.Iwouldliketo
delaythestartforanothertwoweeks.Could you delaythestartdateforme?
Onceagain,thank you verymuchfor offeringit.Ilookforwardto hearingfrom youas
soonaspossible.
Yoursfaithfully
Comment:

Thislettershowsfluency, andincludessome variety in vocabulary andexpressions.
However,thereisalsosomerepetition andsomeerrorsin grammar,such asthe
following:

1. Choiceofthetypeofarticlewhenthefollowingword beginswithavowelsound
   (line1)


2. Verbtense(line2)


3. Incorrectlinkage (replace relativeclause)(line3)


4. Incorrectuseofvocabulary(line5)


5. Missing preposition(line7)


6. Word order(line7)


7. Incorrectvocabulary(line8)


8. Incorrecttimeexpressions(line8)