104 DELIVER THE EXPERIENCE
TABLE 8.7 BEFORE-AND-AFTER EXAMPLES FROM THE PLAIN
ENGLISH CAMPAIGN
BEFORE AFTER
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provided.DIRECTOR’S NOTES
Avoid bullet points. Always. Well, almost always. Bullet
points are perfectly acceptable on pages intended to
be read by your audience, like books, documents, and
e-mails. In fact, they break up the text quite nicely.
Bullet points on presentation slides should be avoided.
Pictures are superior. Focus on one theme per slide, and complement that
theme with a photograph or image. Learn to create visually aesthetic slides. Above all, keep
in mind that you do not have to be an artist to build
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resources.