Appendix 197
- Change: “The language capabilities and challenges facing
every child, including those who are learning English as a
second language, must be carefully considered as we plan
experiences and instruction.”
To: “As we plan, we must carefully consider the language
capabilities and challenges of every child.”
Use simple, everyday language.
- Change: “...obviously, however, it is not enough simply to
set forth a shared vision.”
To: “...but a shared vision isn’t enough.” - Change: “...develop data to demonstrate the correlation
between laboratory test results and field performance.”
To: “...test lab results in the real world.” - Change: “...accordingly, students need to read and study
literary texts in a variety of genres, including poetry, short
stories, novels, plays, essays, and biographies.”
To: “...so students should read and study all kinds of lit-
erature.” - Change: “...throughout the past decade.”
To: “...for 10 years.”
Use as few words as possible.
- Change: “Individuals who are competent at communicat-
ing with others are sensitive to the needs of different audi-
ences.”
To: “Good communicators know different audiences have
different needs.” - Change: “visual diagrams.”
To: “diagrams.” - Change: “the positive as well as the negative.”
To: “the good and the bad.”
Use contractions.
- Change: “We will not....”
To: “We won’t....” - Change: “That, quite frankly, is tragic.”
To: “That’s tragic.”