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• Does everything move the story ahead with nothing extraneous?


• Is everything clear, specific, concise?


• Does your writing flow? Are there transitions between scenes?


• Did you write toward a big ending? Is there a twist at the end?


• Check your grammar and spelling.

Usually, you’ll get two sets of notes on the outline from the network (1. programming,

2. censors). Your story editor will also give notes and may require a rewrite. Make all the
   changes requested in the notes. This is a script for hire, not a script negotiation! Ask ques-
   tions if you don’t understand.
   Once (and if) the outline is approved, you’ll go on to write the script. You might be paid
   separately for the outline, or you may receive payment for both script and outline at once
   after you’ve completed your script.
   Here is an outline from Sony’s Jackie Chan Adventures.

Jackie Chan Adventures © 2003 Sony Pictures Television Inc. Written by David Slack. Story Editor:
Duane Capizzi.

134 Animation Writing and Development

JACKIE CHAN ADVENTURES

“Queen of the Shadowkhan”

(Outline #206)

TEASER

Inside an ANCIENT GOTHIC LIBRARY (something real medieval-

like), JACKIE makes a treacherous 3-STORY CLIMB up a LADDER

to the top shelf where he finds...not a talisman or a

demon portal, but an important BOOK for Uncle’s library:

an unearthly tome with a foreboding picture of a DRAGON

SKULL AND CROSSBONES on the cover (think: an ancient

Chinese version of the legendary Necronomicon). But no