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1. Are the questions and issues that motivate the writer clear?


2. Has the writer effectively realted the conversation that published
   writers are engaged in?


3. What is at issue?


4. What is the writer’s thesis?


5. Is the writer addressing the audience’s concerns effectively?


6. What passages of the draft are most effective?


7. What passages of the draft are least effective?

FIGURE 10.3 A Reader’s Questions: early drafts

the difference between scholars’ understanding of the movement and

more popular treatments in textbooks and photographs. she also tries to

tie in the larger question of historical memory to her analysis of southern

blacks’ struggle for equality — what people remember about the past and

what they forget. In fact, she begins her essay with a quotation she believes

summarizes what she wants to argue (“the struggle of man against power

is the struggle of memory against forgetting”).

As you read taylor’s essay, take detailed notes, and underline passages

that concern you. then write a paragraph or two explaining what she

could do to strengthen the draft. Keep in mind that this is an early draft,

so focus on the top level of the pyramid: the situation or assignment, the

issue, the thesis, and the audience.

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Tasha Taylor

Professor Winters

English 111

October 23, 20—

Memory through Photography

The struggle of man against power is the struggle of

memory against forgetting.

—Milan Kundera

Ask the average American what the key components of the

civil rights movement are, and most people will probably recall Martin

Luther King Jr. speaking of a dream in front of the Lincoln Memorial,

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