An interesting thing happened during the writing of our first draft. Our
conclusion is a bit different, and a bit smarter, than our introduction. This
happens all the time when writing a 50-minute essay. You may not realize it, but
you think while you write, so your first draft conclusion is often wiser than your
first draft intro. By the end, we realized that we were talking about how Krumpf
uses rhetoric and reason to prepare the reader for his argument in the final
paragraph. In our last few minutes, let’s go back and change the introduction to
make it look like this was our point all along!
Here’s the new intro:
In his essay “The Real Danger of Video Games,” Bernie Krumpf argues
that video games are bad for children’s development. He does not take the
common position that video games make kids violent; rather he says that
video games are like puzzles in that they do not allow kids to think
creatively or devise their own solutions. In the opening paragraphs of his
essay, alongside scientific evidence, Krumpf uses humorous contrast,
rhetorical questions, and ridiculous comparisons to prepare the reader to
accept his final argument as serious and worthwhile.Ta-da! Now it looks like we were brilliant from the start! Finally, let’s correct
any spelling or grammar mistakes. We hid four misspellings in the text. Can you
find all of them?
HOW IS THE SAT ESSAY SCORED?
The SAT Essay will receive three separate scores on a scale of 2–8. You want 8s,
not 2s.* The way it works is that you are given a 2–8 score on Reading, a 2–8 on
Analysis, and a 2–8 on Writing.