Writing Academic English 4th Edition

176 Part 111 ISentenceStructure

A. Improvethisparagraph,whichcontainstoomanycompoundsentences.

Changecompoundsentencesintocomplexsentences,usingoneofthe

subordinatorslisted.Useeachsubordinatoronce.Rewritetheparagraphon

a separatesheetofpaper.

after although because when

EqualRightsforWomen

RussianwomenstartedtogainequalityearlierthanwomenintheUnited

States.Theconcept ofequalrightsandresponsibilitiesforwomenwaspartof

communistphilosophy,soRussiansofbothsexeshadequalaccessto

educationandjobsfromthebeginningoftheSovietUnion.The 1937 Soviet

constitutiondeclaredthatwomenandmenhadequalrightsandresponsibilities,

butwomenintheUnitedStatesdonothavelegalequalityeventoday.An

admendmenttotheU.S.Constitutiongivingwomenequalrightshasneverbeen

approved.BeforeWorldWarII,fewU.S.womenworkedoutsidethehome.

Millionsofmenlefttobecomesoldiersduringthewar,andwomentookover

theirjobs.Suddenly,womendiscoveredthattheycoulddoanything.Themen

returnedhome,andwomenbegantodemandtheequalitythattheyhadearned.

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