85We have a Wordy Awkward sentence here due to the “being.” Remember: being is bad!
(B) it has a “being.” Get rid of it!
(C) this answer choice slightly changes the intended meaning. The sentence indicates that there is
a certain cause and effect relationship. Jane Fonda rose to fame in part because she is Henry
Fonda’s daughter, and using a comma with the conjunction “and” removes this cause and effect
relationship.
(D) creates a sentence fragment. Can you hear it? What about Jane Fonda? The sentence never
gets around to telling us.
(E) clear and concise, (E) is the best answer. Remember, you can clear away the phrase between
the two commas (Henry Fonda’s daughter) to test the sentence: Jane Fonda rose to fame as
an actress, model, and fitness guru.
Revised sentence:
Jane Fonda, Henry Fonda’s daughter,
rose to fame as an actress, model, and
fitness guru.
Correct Answer: (E)
Jane Fonda rose to fame as an actress, model,
and fitness guru, being Henry Fonda’s daughter.(A) Jane Fonda rose to fame as an actress,
model, and fitness guru, being Henry
Fonda’s daughter
(B) Being Jane Fonda, Henry Fonda’s daughter
rose to fame as an actress, model, and fitness
guru
(C) Jane Fonda rose to fame as an actress, model,
and fitness guru, and she was Henry Fonda’s
daughter
(D) Jane Fonda, who as Henry Fonda’s daughter
rose to fame as an actress, model, and fitness
guru
(E) Jane Fonda, Henry Fonda’s daughter, rose to
fame as an actress, model, and fitness guru