From Inquiry to Academic Writing A Practical Guide, 3rd edition

306 chAPTER 10 | FRom REvising To EdiTing: WoRking WiTh PEER gRouPs

Tasha Taylor Taylor 1

Professor Winters

English 111

December 5, 20—

Memory through Photography

Memory is such an integral part of what it is to be human,

yet it is something so often taken for granted: people assume that

their memories are accurate to protect themselves from the harsh

realities of the atrocities committed by ordinary people. Even the

pictures used to represent the much- celebrated civil rights move-

ment give us a false sense of security and innocence. For example,

the Ku Klux Klan is most often depicted by covered faces and burn-

ing crosses; the masks allow us to remove ourselves from responsi-

bility. Few could describe Rosa Parks’s connection to the civil

1. How does the writer go about contributing a unique perspective on
   the issue?


2. to what extent does the writer use words and phrases that are
   appropriate for the intended audience?


3. to what extent does the style of citation reflect accepted conventions
   for academic writing?


4. What do you think is working best?


5. What specific aspect of the essay are you least satisfied with at this
   time?

FIGURE 10.7 A Reader’s Questions: Final drafts

■ Analyze a near-Final draft

now read taylor’s near- final draft and write a paragraph detailing what

she can do to strengthen it. Again, you will see that taylor has made

substantial changes. she compares Morrison’s book of photographs to a

spike Lee documentary that she watched with her class. As you read the

essay, focus on the bottom level of the composition pyramid: does the

writer use appropriate language? does she adhere to appropriate con-

ventions for using and citing sources? (see the Appendix for information

on MLA and APA formats.)

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