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Comment:


Thisisananswerwritten byacandidatewhoachievedaBand 6 score.Hereisthe
examiner'scomment:
Thisresponseisunderlengthandismarked down becauseofthis.Onlyafewrelevant
ideasarepresentedandtheseare usedratherrepetitivelyandareinsufficiently
developed orsupported.However,thewritingcommunicatesfluentlyandasatisfactory
rangeofstructuresand vocabularyareused.


Sample 134


Somegovernmentssayhowmany
childrenafamilycanhareintheircountry.Theymaycontrolthenumber of
childrensomeonehasthroughtaxes.
Itissometimesnecessary andrightfora governmenttocontrolthepopulationin
thisway.
Do youagreeordisagree?Givereasonsforyouranswer.


Youshouldwriteatleast 250 words.

Allowyourself 40 minutesforthistask.

modelanswer:


Itiscertainly very understandablethat
somegovernmentsshouldstartlookingatwaysoflimitingtheirpopulationsto a
sustainablefigure.Inthepast, populationswerepartlyregulated byfrequentwarand
widespread disease, butinrecentyearstheeffectsofthosefactorshavebeen
diminished.Countriescan befacedwith a populationthatisgrowingmuchfasterthan
shenation'sfoodresourcesoremploymentopportunitiesandwhosememberscan be
condemnedto poverty bytheneedtofeedextramouths.Theyidentify populationcontrol
asa'meanstoraisinglivingstandards.
Buthowshoulditbeachieved?Clearly,thiswholeareaisavery delicatepersonaland
culturalissue.Many peoplefeelthatthisisnotamatterforthestate.Theyfeelthisis
oneareaoflifewherethey havetherighttomakedecisionsforthemselves.

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