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... and the GLASS VIAL goes FLYING out of his hand. QUICK SHOTS: > FOLLOW—As the VIAL flies through the air... > JACKIE—hi ...

Figure 14.5 Jackie Chan Adventures, “Queen of the Shadowkhan,” written by David Slack, story- board by Seung Eun Kim.Jackie Chan ...

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239 JADE (UNEARTHLY FX) <t’ch>, you were. But things are different now: I have new friends. BACK TO JACKIE—with a new appe ...

The Script 257 JADE—The blue not quite fully drained from her face, strains to call a final order. 246 JADE (SEMI-UNEARTHLY FX) ...

258 Animation Writing and Development 252 JACKIE (firm) If you mean getting a tattoo when I told you not to, yes you did. (warml ...

Exercises Take a joke with a story and try to write it in script format. It’s okay to change the story to make it better or mor ...

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CHAPTER 15 Editing and Rewriting 261 Getting a New Perspective Once you’ve written a first draft of a script, if it’s at all pos ...

The First Rewrite Get the structure right! This should be your first concern. What’s your theme? What has the character learned, ...

The Polish Read the dialogue out loud one character at a time. Now fix it. Make your dialogue unique to each character. Cut expo ...

you might have to decide that it will be good enough and move on. But do make quality a priority always! To the Development Exec ...

can it be expanded? The key to expansion is the antagonist or antagonists. Who is so different from the hero that conflict is in ...

heroine, not the villain, who drives the story (although in a mystery the villain may get the ball rolling by committing the cri ...

inside himself). But in each of these cases, we must also have a real and visible villain. Do you have the right main villain f ...

Is the goal as lofty as possible? “To get revenge” or “to get Trick or Treat candy” is not as lofty a goal as “to rescue the wo ...

before the story) should be revealed gradually later. Even then reveal only what is absolutely essential by showing us, not tell ...